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    dots Submission Name: My head is bursting at the seamsdots
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    Author: Temidayo
    ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
    Elite Ratio:    8 - 161/40/20
    Words: 270
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 433
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1874



    Description:
       An appraisal of what is against what ought to be.


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    dotsMy head is bursting at the seamsdots
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    He walked in unnoticed but those who were watching remarked on the odd grin,
    His success in business won him many friends,
    friends who make decisions and entrench laws
    with or without flaws
    laws that crest rights to the foetus,
    laws learned at an auction,
    pro or abomination,
    views of abortion.
    Why bear kids when love and care are withheld,
    mum-to-be,mother of a drug addiction fettered by spouse frustration,
    screenplay classics from the dept of strife
    harming herself to the point of still birth,a court summon;sentence passed for killing the child she failed to give life.

    Affective outranks cognitive,see emotion genuflects at common sense's passing!

    The lazy is GIVEN excuse not to come to work,paid promptly for doing nothing.
    Moral is divorced as we cross regions,
    whispers exchanged at cult hang-outs
    endorsements passed from those termed political,
    flaunt and the moral clouts,
    for they sign same sex togetherness,
    in their spirit of all voices and fairness
    the resultants leap at us from the toon on the tube,junior is his formative years thinks 'same sex seeking same sex' sounds cool
    I do too
    But is cool always right?
    How come we too easily backed our stand in the fight of wrongs made right.
    Popping these harm-bringing bitter pills all digestible
    immoral made acceptable,
    while we had lil reasons for contesting these ills,
    other than biblical
    but He waltzed in,with an ambition political,
    fostered change even sponsored bills
    ahh! Those who were 'watching' swore of his facial expression.

    Men with odd grins,a world about to buckle at the beams,lil wonder my head is bursting at its seams.




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      Although I can relate to this and agree with the views behind it I don't really like the flow of the poem. You should work on that a bit more...
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting poetical political statement...

    feelings that the changes made were against everything we believe is right...

    did you mean "fetus"?

    i like the line "is cool always right?"

    gives the reflection that making decisions based on what is popular at the time may not be the right way to go...just the cool way.

    i like the way this is constructed...could use some smoothing out...in places.

    but a good read with some guts.

    people don't speak out enough today for what they believe in.


    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-18 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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