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    dots Submission Name: To the lady of my dreamsdots

    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsTo the lady of my dreamsdots

    My face awoke to morning's stroke
    amongst thoughts fleeting,
    bathed in a soft hue.
    I'll caress these thoughts by name,
    they speak of You.

    Today will be another question-mark
    stamped to my soul,
    a need unfulfilled..
    I crave to know, to feel whole..
    My mind trembles,
    deaf to the truth
    I yearn to hear you speak.

    I think you are unique.

    And I wonder,
    do your thoughts ever dance
    when you think of rain?
    Do your eyes ever meet mine
    the same way?
    I'm still here, waiting..

    Will you speak today?


    Submitted on 2011-07-19 10:00:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this. I know this girl, a friend of mine, and lately I've woken up on several mornings now thinking of her. I think I should really do something but I'm afraid I'll ruin our friendship and that's too important to me... Anyway, good writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      feels much tighter now....like the changes.

    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      longing expressed pretty well...

    "mornings'" should be "morning's"

    the wording is a bit common...not so fresh in itself...but the way you use it here...almost works in its simplicity...because this is a baring of feelings.
    i like the "thoughts dancing in the rain" part.

    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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