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    dots Submission Name: when we're old.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 863
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 997



    Description:
       Love of mine
    Someday you will die
    But I'll be close behind
    I'll follow you into the dark
    No blinding light
    Or tunnels to gates of white
    Just our hands clasped so tight
    Waiting for the hint of a spark

    If heaven and hell decide
    That they both are satisfied
    And illuminate the "No"s
    On their vacancy signs
    If there's no one beside you
    When your soul embarks
    Then I'll follow you into the dark.
    -Death Cab for Cutie-


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    dotswhen we're old.dots
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    I hope when we're old,
    your eyes stay the same.
    you know when we're so old
    we forget each other's name.

    That way I can look at your eyes.
    and know exactly where I am.
    they'll remind of past times
    and where we've been.

    I hope when we're old,
    your heartbeat will never falter.
    it will continue like a river,
    always running with it's water.

    that way if I feel alone,
    I can press my head to your chest.
    listen to it slowly pump life
    and know I have had the best.

    I hope when we're old,
    your love will go after I die.
    that way you will see me everyday.
    you will remember and not cry.

    and then when the lights go out
    and in your deathbed you lie.
    I'll be there once again at your last breath
    and we will love for the rest of time.






    Submitted on 2011-07-19 21:04:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      i think this is a very sweet poem...

    smoothly written...(although "its" is the possessive) in that one spot...

    very nicely penned.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      Hm... I like this. A bit too romantic for me but I like it. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, I voted this a 5. But ES is angry with me. Probably because of the writer's block I've had for a year! Very poignant, Squeak!
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by ruejacobs | [ Reply to This ]


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