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    dots Submission Name: to you my one true lovedots

    Author: robbie
    ASL Info:    20/m/mi
    Elite Ratio:    2.79 - 53/53/36
    Words: 286
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 709
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       uhh well i was wrigint this as i talked to her and well i figured id post it here aswell

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    dotsto you my one true lovedots

    as i sit i let my mind flow free
    and thoughts of you come to me
    my love for you has lasted forever
    our lives bound never to sever
    your head full of mixed up and confused emotions
    my love for you as bountful as the oceans
    you hurt and just want to cry
    just the thought of that makes a lil part of me die
    i want to be the one to hold you at night
    but i know right now your in a fight
    with your mind and your heart
    but ill be here waiting for our releationship to start
    ill never leave ill stand tall by your side
    makeing sure you have no reason to hide
    heather moore i love you with all my heart and soul
    you make my heart comlpleat and whole
    just know im ready to be the one you want and need
    in fourth grade you planted that seed
    the one of love that flurished in to this
    god i cant wait un till i get to kiss
    your soft lips and feel your gental touch
    i miss you with all my heart oh so much
    you have no idea the love i hold just for you
    my feelings are ultamitly true
    just listen to your heart it will set you free
    and just be with who you want to be
    i love you heather moore
    and ill never walk out that door
    nomatter what happens ill fight to be by your side
    im never going to run lock up and hide
    just place your trust into me
    and i will help you see
    that this is how every thing should be
    you with me

    Submitted on 2011-07-19 21:46:26     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      The message is clear in this nonetheless...true undying love waiting to be reciprocated.
    A revision can make it a lovely piece, trust me.
    | Posted on 2011-07-20 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno. This looks like it needs a lot of work. You have a lot of spelling errors. Use spellcheck.net it works flawlessly. Or do what I do and use the inbuilt spellchecker in firefox. Anyway, this needs some more attention...
    | Posted on 2011-07-19 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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