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    Author: MyWorld
    ASL Info:    21/M/IN
    Elite Ratio:    3.3 - 76/99/87
    Words: 234
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Venting
    Total Views: 342
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1401



    Description:
       This is my first time logging here for a while and I felt obliged to post something. This is actually one of the first few rhymes I'm writing specifically for a predetermined beat. Wish me luck!

    Funny, someone told me not to post material in public because it'll get stolen. As you can tell, I'm oh so not really concerned.


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    They say believe half of what you see and nothing that you hear
    Well, girl, your actions seem to me that you don't fucking care
    Maybe I ask too much
    For my past screw ups
    I know how bad to you I was
    You were disappointed then
    If now you're mad, we're fucked
    So, let's just get to the point an'
    Figure out if we're bad or good
    'Cause all I hear from you is love
    But, I fear it's just to shut me up
    And I've had enough of feelin like a bother
    We could patch it up, but, I've a feelin' you won't bother
    You don't wanna talk unless I call and really it's all gotten
    To be more than I care to bare
    Don't seem to be much there for us to share and that's a problem
    A bitch is only a problem 'cause I got one.
    Sure as shit, I shoulda stayed single; female's are all rotten
    Yet, some chics wonder why I'm lovey till she fucks me and I just stop then
    Instead of my heart, I'm gonna start givin' my dick
    And, better yet a gift to part, I'll leave a bit on your chin
    Just be glad I don't piss when I'm markin' where I been
    Stick out your tongue and say I missed
    If I was goin' for your mouth, I'd have put the shit in




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