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    dots Submission Name: Native dots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 79
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dots Native dots
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    crispness in her eyes,
    volunteering eternal love
    like oceans living inside oceans
    Expressing arctic chill
    and dividing inside each cube of ice some human heart

    divinity in a champagne glass, she poured herself out into the company of society high and low, loving
    like a mother
    or God

    There is the creation of life inside her
    Womb carrying child, carrying the structure of the evolution of thought

    The ideas perform reality
    and occupy being




    Submitted on 2011-07-21 09:15:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      there is a real baby here, maybe...or the conception of thoughts, of ideas...in the womb of the brain...i love the lines
    "the ideas perform reality
    and occupy being"

    a class ending...to a depiction of high societe and its coldness...and the warmth this person brings to it...melting some of those ice cubes.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-21 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for your last coment i never thot that that post would bring confusion but thats a good thing i no the person who it was written for isnt confused they now have expierenced a sad and lonely life its a long story
    i realy enjoyed your poem it puts a nice picture to words
    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2011-07-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]


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