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    dots Submission Name: Vibrations along a single stringdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 194
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsVibrations along a single stringdots

    Her head turns to follow the things that fly by the window
    hard to catch any detail accelerating and maintaining high speeds

    Her eyes fall flat on the floor mat
    meloncholy gestures
    unified in the grace of her long sighs

    Her heart is a camper at the gates of heaven
    waiting and yearning for someone to call her home as she expects home to call to her

    Waking each morning, such a spread eagle smile
    Such bright aniticipating eyes
    mounting the sidewalks and hills
    as she gathers dirt and trash and gum on the bottom of her shoes

    It is determination that has her dreaming at night of a stack of one hundred dollar bills that seem to set her free

    where she is spinning in water colors and oil and acrylic light
    where her hand can caress the face and texture of her many formed canvases
    where seas of imagination
    flood her senses

    and she tastes the salt of the day into the afternoon
    and is embraced bby the gentle night
    the sweet breath of the moon light
    tasting her in her rest

    Submitted on 2011-07-21 14:00:44     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Absolutely Beautiful!

    | Posted on 2011-08-02 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      F-ing awesome!!! I don't think there is much else to add to that :)
    | Posted on 2011-07-22 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the undertones of happiness and very real way that life is sometimes dirt and gum on your shoes because life is both beautiful colors and the grays in between. Life is both wondrous and dirty. By not keeping the poem neither extremely sad or overly happy you have captured the real essence of life in a short snap shot. I love the duality of the picture. Great write will have to find more of your work. I really enjoyed the length and power behind the words. Perfect Poem in structure and rhythm.

    | Posted on 2011-07-22 00:00:00 | by Soulraven | [ Reply to This ]
      "where seas of imagination flood her senses"

    I liked this poem. It is a great depiction of a life shared by a lot of people. We all aspire to be happy. We must realize that all we really need is hope. I think you touched that well.
    Looking forward to the next day, only to have it go to Hell can be very disappointing, but we press on.
    | Posted on 2011-07-21 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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