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    dots Submission Name: My Mother's Daughter.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Poetry/Alone
    Total Views: 1079
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       sorry if it sounds depressing. I just feel this way sometimes. If you are the sibling to another child, you might understand. Sibling rivalry and all. Not that I don't love my mom or sister. I do. I just feel like an outsider.


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    dotsMy Mother's Daughter.dots
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    I know you have no favorites.
    That's what you always say.
    you love us all same.
    each and every day.

    but why does she have pictures?
    and memories with you?
    when all I have is nothing
    and nothing to lose.

    I know you said we're prefect
    and you're proud to be our mom.
    but you contact with her
    and I fear I don't belong.

    We never have had that connection.
    you haven't tried to yet.
    I try but it doesn't work
    so why don't you forget?

    Forget you have another daughter.
    it is quite easy with me gone.
    I'm tired of trying.
    I've tried to be your spawn.

    but every time I tried.
    I lose more than I get.
    so do yourself a favor.
    and try to forget.

    forget about me.
    It will get better everyday.
    then you'll have the prefect family.
    and I won't be in the way.

    I'm moving anyways.
    so your plan can be set.
    just don't try to remember me.
    Better just forget.




    Submitted on 2011-07-22 23:03:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't totally relate to this as I don't have any brothers. It's better that way though, I would feel sorry for the poor bastards. I'm quite difficult at times. Anyway, it was a good read, keep writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad, lonely, and heart wrenching. This is a fantastic write. Flows nicely and the imagery is good.
    My heart broke a little when I read this because I can relate so closely to it. I can understand mother and sibling issues.
    This was a great write.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading.

    H
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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