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    dots Submission Name: my daughter is my own.dots
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    Author: PopRocksRae
    ASL Info:    21/ F/ Heaven
    Elite Ratio:    2.49 - 232/369/355
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsmy daughter is my own.dots
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    from her first smile.
    to the twinkle in her eyes.
    to the flickers of her heartbeat
    I knew she was to born to be mine.

    her way of crawling.
    the determination in her face
    She has her father's devilish grin.
    and her mother's prefect grace.

    I'm watching her grow up
    she goes through too much.
    but I know with every struggle
    my bond gets stronger with love.

    She is growing into a stronger me
    becoming what's inside.
    I look at her and I know.
    She was born to survive.

    I know that she is prefect
    everyday it get shown.
    How amazing my daughter is.
    my daughter is my own.




    Submitted on 2011-07-22 23:37:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked it. One line that was awkward was "everday it get shown." Typo?
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by darkfeathers | [ Reply to This ]


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