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    dots Submission Name: “Remember me?”dots
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    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 109
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    Description:
       Instead of comms I decided on this way.

    Remember to remember.


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dots“Remember me?”dots
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    To Runes "After Goodbye".

    I grew older and thoughts turned into remembrance.
    Slowly the light faded and the sweetness softly filtered away.
    The mellow memories became shadows and phantoms of a time long gone.
    Sometime yes sometimes there is a flickering as a long gone memory shyly surfaces with a tingling of sweet little bells bringing as cascade of small smiles of remembrance and is gone again.

    Remember me.

    It lasts for but a moment and the taste that lingers on,
    is sweetness that will last forever.

    My memory is still very much alive.
    Take care.

    Joachim.




    Submitted on 2011-07-23 04:13:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this was a nice response to runes, Joachim!
    | Posted on 2011-07-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      :) This really made me smile.. thank you.
    | Posted on 2011-07-25 00:00:00 | by Runes | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. This line though needs something: as cascade of small smiles of remembrance and is gone again. Maybe it should be: smiles of remembrance and yet is gone again. I dunno. Anyway, keep writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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