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    dots Submission Name: To Be a Liedots

    Author: Agent V.
    ASL Info:    23/girl/small town
    Elite Ratio:    7.23 - 38/29/24
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       My first completed poem in years. Oh what a feeling...

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    dotsTo Be a Liedots

    Is it unrealistic to want to feel
    as though nothing will ever come
    between the moment I lost my way
    to the future that lingers beyond?

    It's so natural to transgress
    I can't help but revel the familiarity
    and breathe in that nothing air.
    I close my eyes and drift...

    Time means nothing
    and feels like a lie.
    I'm not sure what I know to be true
    but my memories don't seem to be mine.

    Is it too late to change
    and emerge from this disease
    as someone worth knowing
    until the future dies?

    Trapped in a continuum
    of stalemates and apathy;
    all that's left to do is wait
    for you...are you a lie
    or did you progress to the future
    and leave me to contemplate
    how it would feel to become undone?

    Submitted on 2011-07-23 20:49:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I know that feeling. I'm also recovering from a long period of not writing anything. I like this. I must tell you that it's never too late to change. I've changed quite drastically this year, not all for better though, and I'm 28 years old in August now...
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Need a little "new", or "change"? Life is short and youth is even shorter. Follow your heart as wisely as you can.

    I like this write.

    It's expressed well.
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      this is like someone becoming something and then wondering...am i really me?

    where did i go?

    my memories don't really seem like mine...
    maybe apathy just kills what grows inside us..the possibilities...we get into a rut and wonder what we have become...

    maybe being undone and starting over would be a good thing...

    get rid of the baggage...

    sort of like the early stanzas...but really like the last one...that is sharp and different.

    | Posted on 2011-07-23 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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