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    Author: Agent V.
    ASL Info:    23/girl/small town
    Elite Ratio:    7.23 - 38/29/24
    Words: 104
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 559
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 675



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       Not sure how I feel about this one. It wanted to come out, and so I let it.


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    Take me to the place where all things weep
    I need to see if there's still some feeling
    left in these tired jaded bones;
    I lack the sincerity to go alone.

    My defense is so strong
    I can't tell if it's defective.
    I seem to be immune
    to the beauty of creation...

    (A mastermind without a master
    leading to an incomplete status.)

    I idle in the space
    between memories and reality
    bordering on defeat,
    but striving for a chance
    to remember what it means to smile.

    To have hope is to know
    that you have the means to survive.




    Submitted on 2011-07-23 22:15:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this a lot. Especially the first line. This poem is really sincere and simple. I like them that way. Keep writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad, yet hopeful. This was written very well. The flow, imagery, and emotion is very well complimented.
    I can very much relate to this piece as well.
    Fantastic write.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading.

    H
    | Posted on 2011-07-24 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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