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    dots Submission Name: Hope for the love to returndots
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    Author: DeathTone
    ASL Info:    32 / Male / United States
    Elite Ratio:    5.54 - 81/55/30
    Words: 212
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       Who know what broken hearted people feel but other broken hearted people. Yes I am sad.


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    dotsHope for the love to returndots
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    Sitting in complete sadness
    Going through painful madness
    Drowning in my tears that none can see
    I feel the dreadful hurt within me
    Its a feeling like no other I have felt
    Within a seared heart I melt
    She has driven me to depression
    In my world of her obsession
    Give her the world in which I can provide
    But within my soul is a big divide
    I want the love I give her to be given back
    Instead I allow her to constantly attack
    She should be mine and I her's
    And allow my life to be a blissful blur
    I love her like no other will or shall in this life
    In hope she shall take out the knife
    She knows I love her even though I do not know why
    And to the world I tell a lie
    My emotions are wild and fierce
    But I guess not strong enough for her heart to be pierced
    Should I give up on what I want in my existance
    Showing constant persistance
    I guess I will hope the answer will come soon
    To kiss under the stars and moon
    I hide my tears and all my fears
    so none can behold my sorrow
    Oh well, there is always tomorrow

    Death-




    Submitted on 2011-07-25 21:38:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this reminds me of one of my exes...

    kept hoping things would change and she would quit attacking me verbally and start loving me...but sometimes we just keep dreaming..and never want to wake up to how it is...

    there is a simplicity to this piece...but also a poetic feeling...and much emotion put out there.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-25 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      (My emotions are wild and fierce
    But I guess not strong enough for her heart to be pierced)


    -Ones heart can be extremely stubborn/stoney but there's always something that can make the heart of stone soft and light like a feather, you just have to figure out what that something is-



    (I want the love I give her to be given back
    Instead I allow her to constantly attack
    She should be mine and I her's
    And allow my life to be a blissful blur
    I love her like no other will or shall in this life
    In hope she shall take out the knife)

    These lines remind me of the quote down below->

    "Love is not written on paper, for paper can be erased. Nor is it etched on stone, for stone can be broken. But it is inscribed on a heart and there it shall remain forever."


    Beautifully Penned and yes love can be quite painful at times, its a mixture of pleasure and pain~

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-07-25 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]


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