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    dots Submission Name: tithedots
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    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 135
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       No offense to anyone - just a thought


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    dotstithedots
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    The prophet spreads his arms and speaks
    Talking of despair
    How belief is the soap that will clean the dirt
    The dirt off their souls
    Belief in him
    And a check written to him
    Or some cash put in a nice and neat envelope

    He speaks of hope
    But says hope is only for the respectable
    Or those who have felt enough guilt to become respectable
    Or at least respectable in public
    While they do their deeds in private

    He weaves patterns using words
    Capturing their imaginations
    People need
    He gives
    But he also takes

    The screen projects verses
    Verses which could mean anything he wants them to mean

    Like a skilled surgeon he goes into their minds and implants a version of god that is going to benefit him




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      Or those who have felt enough guilt to become respectable


    I like this line and I think there is a lot of truth to it.

    I definately see your point here, and this is one thing about "religion" that drives me crazy. I hate how people make God out to be arrogant and all consuming. The entire message is lost.

    Over all I still have hope that the message will weed out the, uh, weeds :D


    Love it Sol.

    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      Love the cynical tone....so well done! Yes, the only dirt to be found is their own dirty practices...And he feeds off of the blind faith of his followers.

    The last two lines are wonderful. His task is made even easier because his followers allow him in, want him in, invite him in.....and once his "version" of god is implanted, they're like robots to do his bidding....

    Good write!
    | Posted on 2011-07-26 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      this is absolute truth---evangelists make money off of poor souls or rich souls...

    jimmy swaggert was on a late night talk show on CNN once..and the publisher of rolling stone mag. asked him this..."if you are so broke..and your ministry in such need of money...why not sell one of your two million dollar homes?"

    good question....good poem of yours.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very cynical view, no doubt. But I some how like it. I like the way you used thse words, especially for those short two word lines towards the end. Very powerful! Maybe I feel that only cause I agree with you in someways. But its still a very good poem!
    | Posted on 2011-07-26 00:00:00 | by rsujith | [ Reply to This ]


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