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    dots Submission Name: tic tocdots
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    Author: Solomon Disease
    ASL Info:    101, male, earth
    Elite Ratio:    3.58 - 284/292/104
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    The piano boy plays
    Focused on the music that is bursting through his fingers
    The drummer plays mesmerizing rhythms
    The guitar player plays soaring melodies
    The bass player drives the low end that rocks the body back and forth
    They haven't made it in the mainstream
    This is their last hope
    To be playing music for a living
    The audience consists of the deaf and desensitized
    They'd rather be listening to some electronic masturbation
    To feed their electronic hearts
    Their electronic souls
    They are the mainstream now

    Real music
    By real people
    Playing to real people
    Sharing an out of body experience
    . . . That's just something those hippies used to talk about

    But the musicians still play
    Hoping they'll make at least one person really feel again




    Submitted on 2011-07-26 11:30:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Time waits for no one...so each person tries to rise above he rest; to have their voices heard, to mean something beyond the silent metronome of the clock.
    | Posted on 2013-09-09 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      I have to agree with Jacob, no other way to say it for me.

    Very cool topic.
    Very moving.
    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      i think this is a lot like poets feel...there was a generation where poetry was so accepted...the abstract as well as the straightforward poetry...the Beats who got away from mainstream but still played music with their words...

    this is an excellent piece of writing...my favorite i have read here in a long time...if i did favs..this would go in..

    as poets we hope at least one reader will appreciate our music.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-26 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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