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    dots Submission Name: still alivedots
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    Author: afra
    ASL Info:    15/female/canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.33 - 4/9/19
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsstill alivedots
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    people hate me ,
    what ever i say they don't believe ,
    they want me no more ,
    but i am still alive ,

    on my they always shout ,
    my eyes are wet with tears all the times ,
    tears is what i am all about ,
    but i am so stubborn that i am still alive ,

    all i asked was a little love ,
    but all you gave me is tears ,
    drowning in tears begging for a hug ,
    i am disappointed but i am still alive ,

    you took away my sun ,
    i am feeling so lonely in there cold nights ,
    you broke my heart just for fun ,
    i have a broken heart but i am still alive ,

    i am living with this uncontrolled pain ,
    i am dying in every single movement of my life ,
    i just want to put a bullet straight in my brain ,
    i hate my life but i am still alive ,




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      i like the flow of this and i do can relate to this as i felt this during my early years.

    this part

    "i am living with this uncontrolled pain ,
    i am dying in every single movement of my life ,
    i just want to put a bullet straight in my brain ,
    i hate my life but i am still alive ,"

    right now i still fight with my rage but learned to control it. made it to my advantage.

    and with this entry i will be reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2011-07-31 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]


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