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    dots Submission Name: Out for Brunchdots

    Author: Rainwater
    Elite Ratio:    2.25 - 7/29/19
    Words: 247
    Class/Type: Poetry/Childrens
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    dotsOut for Brunchdots

    A zebra, gazelle, and crocodile
    All went out for brunch
    For it was far too late for breakfast
    And far too early for lunch

    The zebra asked the gazelle
    What it was she'd get
    “Simply a salad” she replied
    with a smile and nod of her head

    The gazelle returned the question
    In what the zebra would delight
    “Some crumpets and tea, I do declare”
    Said she, quite outright

    When they asked their friend crocodile
    What he'd be having for food:
    “Leaves and greens are all very keen,
    But I'm really just not in the mood”

    They both nodded acceptance
    At the response of the gator
    As he licked his scaly lips
    And signaled for their waiter

    “For the gazelle, a salad;
    The zebra, crumpets and tea
    (Make the portions nice and big
    For today we'll have a feast)”

    He smiled a toothy grin
    And took a sip of oolong
    The last part he had whispered,
    Hoping his friends hadn't caught on

    The food came and the ladies ate
    While the croc, he did just stare
    And when they were done, he paid for brunch
    Thinking it only fair

    After leaving their table
    Said the croc as sweet as he could
    “Let's go for a walk along this path,
    Into the lonely wood”

    The girls agreed with joy
    the croc just seemed so sweet
    Until after a while, the crocodile
    said “Now it's time for me to eat”

    Submitted on 2011-07-27 22:41:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like the representations in this piece...the graceful creatures duped by the sly reptile....

    Interesting contrast from beginning to end....the whole idea of whether it's time for breakfast or lunch...but to the crocodile, it doesn't matter...He'll eat whenever...

    Nice write...
    | Posted on 2011-07-28 00:00:00 | by rubie | [ Reply to This ]
      Not really for small kids but older. Good meter and the rhymes / off rhymes work - thanks for the smile.
    | Posted on 2011-07-28 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      cute piece...a nursery rhyme in one sense...but also a statement on how the naive can be so fooled...and so taken by the scammer....

    there are many crocs in society...and many unsuspecting zebras and gazelles...

    in one spot...did you mean "paid"?

    anyway..a clever write..
    welcome to ES

    | Posted on 2011-07-27 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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