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    dots Submission Name: i'd let you do it againdots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 150
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsi'd let you do it againdots
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    kiss me softly
    hold me in your arms
    just one last time
    lie to me again
    and tell me you love me
    let me fall asleep on your chest
    just one more time
    let me gaze into your beautiful blue eyes
    let me believe all the lies you ever whispered to me
    just like i did all the years before
    one last time i will watch you walk out of my life
    one last time i will shed another tear for you
    one last time i will use that blade to carve our story

    one last time remember you did this to me
    you stole my heart and shattered it
    you lied to me for years
    and i still chose to believe you
    even though i knew i shouldn't
    but i still want that one last time
    to allow you to do it all again




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      i don't know why but why but as i starting reading your piece it feels like a song. i even have a slow beat playing on my head. its a simple and yet deep piece. it makes me feel the experience you had. from the joy to the sadness and yet you wont even mind letting it happen again. i still feel the strength in you from your piece.
    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]
      Was he that good? :) I dunno, you definitely got the inspiration and right mindset to do this yet you still need some training. Try reading some stuff from people that post since the old days on this site. Like me! :) Just joking. Also a good poet that I would recommend is T.S. Eliot. Try reading his stuff and concentrate on the way he uses language as a tool and not a distraction...

    Anyway. keep on writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-29 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]


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