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    dots Submission Name: I lovedots
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    Author: allmine
    ASL Info:    25/chick/your nightmares
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 33/69/45
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
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    I love that look of pain in your eyes every every time you look at me. I love how I'm the only one you always run back to. I love how the last time I saw you had to hold back the tears so that you wouldn't cry in front of her. I love how I'm still the one on your mind. I love the fact that deep inside she knows the truth but there's nothing she can do about it. I love how were the only ones who know the whole truth. I love how everyone but me believes all your little lies. I love that even after everything that has happened I still have the power to break your heart like you did mine.




    Submitted on 2011-07-28 16:09:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this. I feel like it's a sort of.. Dark joy. Something I understand and admire. The knowledge of your own power.
    I felt like some of it could have been worded a little more clearly, but the human mind is rarely coherent, and I feel like this is a straight dictation of thoughts.
    All in all, very nice :)
    | Posted on 2011-07-28 00:00:00 | by Rainwater | [ Reply to This ]


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