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Arrh! got it all wrong


Author: Temidayo
ASL Info:    29 male Nigeria-lagos
Elite Ratio:    8 - 161 /40 /20
Words: 232
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Guess I got it all wrong


Arrh! got it all wrong



I got it all wrong,
felt if I generously on a regular gave head,
this woman would like the play and definately stay
After all said and done,she did the opposite and left instead.

I got it all wrong,
to believe what I was told - if me loved her less in this relationship I would control best,
consequently it died from a lack of what I withheld,for it required two to invest.

I got it all wrong
felt that if I feasted alone
my heart would be forever glad
but then I remembered sharing love
it was the best I ever had.

I got it all wrong
when I thought my best mate and me
would be great friends forever.
We seldom worked at it
thus we were soon disbanded
by unfavourable weather.

I got it all wrong
when I felt that love
was all that mattered for a woman to stay?
Nay! Comfort and understanding
ought to be factored in the fray.

I got it all wrong
when I thought the wicked
are miserable and lonely.
They¡¯re having a ball all the time
never lacking company.

I got it all wrong, I guess
thinking you¡¯ll appreciate this first reading.
If you don¡¯t, I reckon; at this point
a FULL STOP
is what this piece as also all evil be needing.




Submitted on 2011-07-29 01:09:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  Hi actually you got it all right.
Regards Joachim
| Posted on 2011-07-29 00:00:00 | by Joachim | [ Reply to This ]


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