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    dots Submission Name: Abcessdots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 124
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 458
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       Feeling this way toward the two loves of my life


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    dotsAbcessdots
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    i can imagine the salt on your lips
    from the sweat of your day
    in the summer nights when you come home late

    You have been working and I have been waiting

    Just a breath away from the next moment every moment I have been wanting you

    I bottle up the time
    and carefully hold the tears inside my eyes

    And I cross the distance
    how many days will I wait and never arrive
    how many steps can I take toward you tonight

    To the moment
    and the taste
    to the sun and
    your face
    and all the while you say you cling to me

    I can't feel it
    And I dont know it is there




    Submitted on 2011-07-29 15:37:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      When I miss some one, I miss them very much.

    This write captures well the eccence absence.

    I hope you see them soon.
    | Posted on 2011-07-31 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      to me - this poem , was very deep and yet very soft. at most itz very sad. and strong-hearted.
    all in all - i liked it very much...
    good write

    my fav line:
    I bottle up the time
    and carefully hold the tears inside my eyes
    o the passion ....
    bloodstone

    my good friend ...itz been some time,
    with no rush - feel free to read my postings
    | Posted on 2011-07-29 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]


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