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    dots Submission Name: The Facadedots

    Author: rsujith
    Elite Ratio:    3.22 - 67/25/9
    Words: 240
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Facadedots

    We are,
    No, we were.
    We could have been.
    But we shall not.

    Today, we part ways
    And we look to make it painless.
    We dig for excuses,
    rake the soil
    and roil the wine
    we open our hearts but we still tone it down
    all to make it painless.

    We make a hundred excuses
    Of why not
    Where none was needed.
    Where the only excuse
    Was the lack of courage
    To sit and work on it,
    To see through the polythene sliver
    At the diamond lying beneath
    And to trust in the power to see through the inevitable.
    We’d rather accept it as it comes
    Cause we are cowards.

    We are guilty of the same mistakes
    Of putting on facades of charm
    And of soft souls underneath
    Of hiding behind verbose walls
    And not stepping ahead to faith
    Of not believing that the chinks in our armour
    Were the best parts of us.
    For deceiving ourselves
    In the name of society.

    Today we part ways
    And we open hearts to say goodbyes
    But we look beyond what could have been,
    We look beyond those moments
    That should not have been overlooked,
    We look at the strong armour
    We had put on for ages
    And build a new façade,
    One of nonchalance and strength.

    Where so much could have been,
    Now there is only a tough façade
    Covering a crumbling soul.

    Submitted on 2011-07-30 10:58:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like this, it's so true. It reminds me of one of my own poems "Mea Culpa". Anyway, I've enjoyed this, keep on writing!
    | Posted on 2011-07-30 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]

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