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    dots Submission Name: The nightmaredots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 113
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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       I am at war with my self. Hopes and revelations do not always coincide. Nightmares oppress dreams. Take care and sleep soundly.


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    dotsThe nightmaredots
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    The nightmare rests

    Somewhere
    Down a lonely path
    Where light does not pass
    Safe and hidden
    With runes forbidden

    The nightmare waits

    Obfuscating
    In a field of wishes
    With growls and hisses
    A black ballet
    Where dreams can't parlay

    The nightmare schemes

    Surveilling
    Upon a celestial perch
    Where eyes cannot search
    Stone like and still
    With cravings to kill

    The nightmare stalks

    Omnipresent
    From a furlough of love
    With the wings of a dove
    And sin sweet like skin
    Where secrets begin

    The nightmare sieges

    Mercilessly
    A seeker's soul
    Where sorrows have hold
    Cold and lonely
    With triumph and trophy

    The nightmare rests




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      Awesome write. I can so follow along, seeing a dark nightmare just waiting in its shadows, stalking, scheming....as you put it. Very dark and gloomy. I like. :)
    | Posted on 2011-08-07 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      AFTER STEPPING OUT OF THE LAST WORLD
    U CREATED [THE PIECE W/ MY ZELDA REF.]
    i was blind going into this one
    didn't know what i was in for .

    i have 2 say
    the cutting & Splitting
    very well done

    u did real good, kodos

    i think the poem got its dream
    the wordplay stays true
    to the poems dark theme

    there were many good bullets
    this 1 is my fav
    `where eyes cannot search
    very deep

    = hope and revelation, R not[always] the same thing


    keep pen-in
    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      Obfuscating
    In a field of wishes
    With growls and hisses
    A black ballet
    Where dreams can't parlay

    The nightmare schemes

    Surveilling
    Upon a celestial perch
    Where eyes cannot search
    Stone like and still
    With cravings to kill

    The nightmare stalks

    Beautiful imagery you've etched here. and that picture of yours keeps scaring me lol, I keep forgetting to expect it. My heart is still beating fast lol.

    But this was a wonderful to read, I do adore dark poetry.

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-08-02 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I love your writings, they are daaaark. But you master creativity with your word usage and your imagery, you convey your message very well.

    I can definately appreciate this. Though my soul searched for the light and the silver lining...left me wanting. :)
    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      this is dark and restless like memories of ex lovers with no closure...the memories sit in a chair by our bedside and watch us try to sleep, as our minds in rem...keep churning and turning over and over with thoughts of the past.

    if only we could come to terms with what we loved and lost...

    i like the haunting, shadowy feeling of this...and what a line...
    "a black ballet/ where dreams can't parlay"

    that is an exquisite line...the kind of line i would like to see more of...to enhance the piece even more.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-07-31 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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