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    dots Submission Name: Comes With The Mourningdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsComes With The Mourningdots

    Tasting silver linings in the morning air
    metal iron running
    out of my body
    replenished, replaced
    by the bitter

    Submitted on 2011-08-01 10:16:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i bet this is how my father feels
    when he has woken
    to nurse his hot coffee @ 6am-
    colours of beauty ....

    very good write very ...

    keep pen-in
    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      You did a wonderful job writing this :)

    My fav lines-

    Tasting silver linings in the morning air

    Very interesting and capitvating!

    | Posted on 2011-08-02 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. It's like light flickers just before you wake up. I'm also writing minimal stuff like this lately. Keep up the good work!
    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      life always looks better in the morning...but then as the day wears on...we have more heavy metal we need to let run out of our body, and hope what replaces it..is a sweeter taste..

    interesting piece..i like the brevity of words, but the complications of thought...

    less is more..so often and this is great proof....

    i like.

    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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