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    dots Submission Name: Ripedots
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    Author: sensetofeel
    Elite Ratio:    7.21 - 25/20/7
    Words: 220
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    Description:
       This is a product of getting thrown off my horse, so to speak.


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    I do not know the color of your eyes
    Or the plump shape of your lips.
    I do not know the set of your jaw
    Or how your neck hangs over your chest

    I do not know the largeness of your hands
    Or if your skin is white silk or brown maple
    I do not know the severity of your scars
    Or if your heart beats strong

    I do not know who you are
    or who I am without you
    I do not know where you are
    or what it will feel like to be with you


    I do know that your eyes are kind
    And your lips tender
    I do know that you hold your jaw high
    And your neck flows delicately into your firm chest

    I do know your hands feels secure
    And that your skin blends perfectly with mine
    I do know that I can listen and heal you
    And that your heart will beat only for me



    I do know that you must exist
    Or my existence is at an end in this lifetime

    I do know that I am searching for you
    And that I am ready




    Submitted on 2011-08-01 13:45:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ripe indeed.

    I do know that you must exist
    Or my existence is at an end in this lifetime

    I do know that I am searching for you
    And that I am ready



    Great lines!

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-08-02 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      i like this. mostly because i feel the same.

    i believe/know/have come to terms with the other one (whoever they may be). i find for myself, i do call out to the one i haven't met yet but will someday.

    it's not that i believe in fairy tales, because i don't. but i have this deep seeded notion, that there is someone waiting for me to find them just as much as they are waiting to find me.

    and there is a time when you just become ready.

    anyhoo...

    just some thoughts.

    to be ripe is a thing indeed.

    | Posted on 2011-08-02 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      I dunno. Your partner here feels kinda remote despite all the details. Like you've chosen her only because she is there... Anyway, it's a decent write...
    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      wow what beautiful words...so perfectly put...i like the repetition of the lines...at first i do not know you...but then, yes, i do know you, in the sense of what i am looking for...

    i am ripe, ready , receptive...

    for love


    some of us are overripe. but still hopeful.

    jacob
    ps
    i have been thrown off a few horses...both literally and figuratively.
    | Posted on 2011-08-01 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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