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    dots Submission Name: The Hypocritedots

    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    37/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 22/27/28
    Words: 140
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Hypocritedots

    Sleek and smooth,
    moves with a Jesus groove
    A bible under the arm,
    the gospel in his charm

    He wears a saintly smile,
    with the same mouth
    he utters filthy lies
    He gives you that firm, felicitous handshake,
    with the same hand
    he uses to beat his wife
    He gives you that honest, comforting look,
    with the same eyes
    he uses to undress a child
    He cares and loves oh so deeply,
    with the same heart
    that will one day break yours
    He speaks words oh so sweetly,
    with the same tongue
    that stabs the back so conveniently
    He listens oh so sincerely,
    with the same ears
    that hear only opportunity

    Always talks the walk,
    never walks the talk
    Like a personality on the split,
    like a coin on the flip
    Heaven sent,
    with Hell's intent
    The Hypocrite.

    Submitted on 2011-08-03 05:46:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Omg this so true unfortunately. I can't stand it when someone who calls themselves a pastor or bishop etc, preaches a good message but as soon as his foot touches the ground outside of the church his true colors are shining like a devilish rainbow.

    Always talks the walk,
    never walks the talk

    Yea too many people do that an its so annoying.

    This was nicely penned, spoke the truth, nice rhymes and flow was surperb ^.^

    btw "Devilish Rainbow" doesn't that sound like an awesome title for a poem? lol, you should use it one day ;-) if you want.

    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      Sad but sometimes true. Obviously such either does not believe in Hell at all or is directly engaged in serving same. "You there! Move on over to the hottest corner!"
    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]
      "the ears that hear only opportunity"

    looking for his chance to spring on his prey...in so many ways....the abuser with the split personality...looks so unassuming, seems to be such a good man on the outside...cons us into false security...and it is worse when it is a man of the cloth...

    and there are many who use their position to take advantage of the unsuspecting...

    this is really well thought out...from beginning to end, no unnecessary wanderings...a very astute description.

    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      This is cynical even by *my* standards lol

    I really like the explosion that is the last stanza, it's like it drops you really quickly into the end.....the hypocrite.

    The first part, where you are showing the "flip-side" of the holy man, using his arms, heart, tongue, etc. This is going to sound weird, but I really liked the smile, the hand, and the mouth. Not sure about the deception provided for the heart, the tongue, and the ears.
    They seemed a bit forced.

    The hand one is powerful, reminds me of a lyric,

    "With the hand of God he's gripping tighter"

    Always fancied such strong irony.

    Anyways it was a good and catchy write.

    | Posted on 2011-08-03 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]

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