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    dots Submission Name: Mentaly connecting the ......................dots
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    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 422
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    Description:
       I realy was just mentally connecting the dots. Figured I would share it. Take care.


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    dotsMentaly connecting the ......................dots
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    Wish
    Upon a falling star
    Careful for what you
    Wish

    Dream
    A little dream
    Tread
    Carefully, for you
    Tread
    Upon my
    Dream

    Rise
    And shine
    Rise
    Like the tide
    Fall
    From the sky
    Fall
    Head over heals

    Love
    Careful for whom you
    Love
    Others like you
    Love
    Yourself

    Bleed
    Your heart out
    Bleed
    Like a stuffed pig
    Out
    Of the unknown
    Out
    Of time

    Live
    Like no tomorrow
    Die
    and let
    Live
    Like you can't
    Die

    This
    There must be more than
    This
    Is it




    Submitted on 2011-08-03 18:10:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Very interesting. I also liked the structure. I like the last stanza. :) Is it......
    | Posted on 2011-08-07 00:00:00 | by dreamer37517 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like what you have going on here! It has a really nice flow/structure and it made for a very enjoyable read.

    I like the meaning in the first two stanzas best, especially the second one.

    Dream a little dream.....tread carefully....dreaming on my dream.

    Of course we all want to shine, and no one wants to be outshined.

    Great poem and a favorite for sure!
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the structure of this.
    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]


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