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    dots Submission Name: it painsdots
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    Author: afra
    ASL Info:    15/female/canada
    Elite Ratio:    1.33 - 4/9/19
    Words: 138
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsit painsdots
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    when i need you , you leave me alone ,
    and you say i am not in your love zone ,

    all i want you to know that it pains ,
    but my love for you doesn't drains ,

    when you talk with me in a loud voice ,
    or make lame excuses and say i have no choice ,

    it pains ,
    when you leave me alone in the rain ,

    when you say to me go away ,
    i dont have time for you i am busy today ,

    when i text you dont reply ,
    or when when you leave with out saying good bye ,

    i want you to know that it hurts me and it pains ,
    but my love for you still remains ,




    Submitted on 2011-08-04 07:39:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      over here i can tell you feelings
    you got a boyfriend who ignores you but you still love him
    i am no poet but i really think that tihis poem is very nice
    i love the last part
    "all i want you to know that it hurts me and it pains
    but my love for you still remains
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by rockhard15 | [ Reply to This ]


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