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    dots Submission Name: A Parody of Farcesdots

    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.09 - 75/182/213
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 733
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       Finished: I feel it speaks for itself-

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    dotsA Parody of Farcesdots

    Insensibly I alone never felt this regret;
    consequently as human neither can I forget
    Obscuring it all, my constituents' thunderous applause
    They pray for divine elucidation for the said encore
    despite the reoccurring failure I respite for clause
    Unable to captivate the truth in --unjust-- comedy.
    Just mindless laughing from the fiery morgue's rancor;
    An upbeat concerto --flamboyantly-- Vivaldi
    and yet we stride mockingly lacking hesitation;
    Swapping masks; a pathetic rehash to become them-
    A taste of bile; lips quiver and tongues roll of phlegm.
    Alas! That moment of silence; contemplation
    Punchline rise once more; please tell us what it means
    The joke of our life- We're just laughing at our dreams

    Submitted on 2011-08-04 09:56:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I honestly like the way you finished this, you could've left it the way it was, but this is still good :)

    I like these lines-

    Punchline rise once more; please tell us what it means
    The joke of our life- We're just laughing at our dreams


    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm got to tell you...i really liked the first version...less is more..i think it left more to the imagination, and i thought the vivaldi line was perfect to end the poem.

    but i am just one reader...sometimes i feel we overexpose.

    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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