Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: A Parody of Farcesdots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: HisNameIsNoMore
    ASL Info:    28 - Male - Ohio
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 75/182/217
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 748
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 813



    Description:
       Finished: I feel it speaks for itself-


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsA Parody of Farcesdots
    -------------------------------------------


    Insensibly I alone never felt this regret;
    consequently as human neither can I forget
    Obscuring it all, my constituents' thunderous applause
    They pray for divine elucidation for the said encore
    despite the reoccurring failure I respite for clause
    Unable to captivate the truth in --unjust-- comedy.
    Just mindless laughing from the fiery morgue's rancor;
    An upbeat concerto --flamboyantly-- Vivaldi
    and yet we stride mockingly lacking hesitation;
    Swapping masks; a pathetic rehash to become them-
    A taste of bile; lips quiver and tongues roll of phlegm.
    Alas! That moment of silence; contemplation
    Punchline rise once more; please tell us what it means
    The joke of our life- We're just laughing at our dreams




    Submitted on 2011-08-04 09:56:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I honestly like the way you finished this, you could've left it the way it was, but this is still good :)

    I like these lines-

    Punchline rise once more; please tell us what it means
    The joke of our life- We're just laughing at our dreams

    Althea~


    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      mmmm got to tell you...i really liked the first version...less is more..i think it left more to the imagination, and i thought the vivaldi line was perfect to end the poem.

    but i am just one reader...sometimes i feel we overexpose.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    191985

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    May 31 2018 written by Chelebel
    Break Up written by WriteSomething
    Pressure written by hybridsongwrite
    Date night written by expiring_touch
    Wavelength written by saartha
    Trails written by Daniel Barlow
    Skin of Fables written by ShadowParadox
    The Promise written by annie0888
    Be Free written by hybridsongwrite
    Bee Keeper written by endlessgame23
    To Glow written by krs3332003
    I will call out your name written by RisingSon
    Cage written by distortedcloud
    It's been a while written by Sharati_hottie
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Treasure Chest written by PieceOfCake
    To written by SavedDragon
    Our Cinder Crisis written by SavedDragon
    Once Again written by krs3332003
    In the Mouth of Elysium written by HisNameIsNoMore
    Pain, an elixir. written by Ramneet
    Song written by Daniel Barlow
    Life changes in a moment written by Ramneet
    To the King written by HisNameIsNoMore
    untitled written by Chelebel
    Linger written by saartha
    Wish written by Daniel Barlow
    One Thing written by Wolfwatching

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry