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    dots Submission Name: Devil's Rainbowdots
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    Author: TiaanK
    ASL Info:    37/M/Dancing in the dark
    Elite Ratio:    4 - 22/27/28
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
    Total Views: 976
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       Thanks Althea for the title, and asking me to write a poem about it...this is what I came up with..


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    dotsDevil's Rainbowdots
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    Never ending
    chase
    for that illusive
    pot of gold
    Barely have time to say
    Sorry;
    seem to have left my moral values at home
    Can't recall where I put my conscience,
    I had it in my hand a minute or so ago,
    maybe it's lying,
    next to my generosity?
    Doesn't matter
    Fuck it
    Gotta go
    Gotta run
    I'm meeting greed at three,
    then off to have some fun with fraud
    Please;
    Leave a message after the beep,
    I'm out to make some more
    Less is more, says the guy
    who's got no more
    Ha ha, anyway...
    In case of emergency,
    I can be found
    at the end
    of the devil's rainbow
    I'm there,
    six hundred sixty six
    days of the year

    Beep.


    -TK 2011




    Submitted on 2011-08-04 14:47:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really like the ending. The rest of the poem is not on par imo. Let me have a go at it, I'm feeling good :)

    Devil's Rainbow
    A roller coaster of feelings
    Like when the needle first pierces your vein
    And your saggy eyes start to roll out tears of blood

    Devil's Rainbow
    You can ride everyday!
    Even in your own home!

    :)

    Haha! Not that good really but it's the best I can come up with at 7:40 AM.
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      You know what I wouldve like to have seen? I wish you wouldve done this using all seven deadly sins!
    I saw greed and fraud so close together, and I was like "wait," but I couldn't find the others.

    Reason I say that is because there are seven sins, and seven colors of the rainbow.

    Anyways I thought this was pretty fun nonetheless. But seriously I think you should intertwine the seven deadly sins in there!
    I'll give you 100 ES dollars lol

    I'm serious about everything except for the made up currency, GO FOR IT!!!
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      Lol Awesome, you made it and its beautiful, going into my favs. And yes Greed is the theme of this poem, I agree with Jacob :)

    Nicely penned my friend!

    Althea~
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      the old "666"--

    i like this...a rainbow...something so positive after a storm...something we all aspire to get to...a thing of beauty..

    yet you come from the opposite angle here...and perfectly...

    it is often what we do to get to that rainbow that is pretty stormy...and we leave much devastation behind...

    greed greed greed, the need for greed...

    i like what sheryl crow says..."it's not needing what you want, it's wanting what you've got"

    good poem

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-04 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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