I see this vision as it develops in your words as though it were on an actual canvas. The lifeless background is inhabited by an organic foreground. The (wandering) soldier represents, to me the struggle for life. The crow represents the end of the struggle, death. If you did mean wondering soldier instead of wandering soldier, that adds some depth, in that humans can consider the nature of existence. But, as the lines are written, I do not believe wondering works as well as wandering. In any event, I like this picture you have made with words. The word contemplating show me the artist creating and, if I extrapolate, I may find the artist is god over this vision. I do not have any problem with the word crimson although it is often used to represent death, but death is an underlying theme here.
I like this BUT I totally hate the word crimson. Dunno really why, because of this site I guess, but I hate it and refuse to ever use it. It sticks out here even more as it kinda rhymes and resonates with the word mountain. I think you should change it into anything else, really. Other than that it's a good piece. Keep on writing!
raising questions as I raise painted lines
and change this crimson mountain top to fade
across the base of the sky
That's just gorgeous.
The only qualm I have is that you repeat contemplating twice. I know you were trying to use repetition to create rhythm, but I think you should either continue using it at the beginning of every stanza or change one to another word.