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    dots Submission Name: Crush, crush, crush....dots

    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsCrush, crush, crush....dots

    I forgot what it feels like
    To be shy
    To be a coward
    With out a reason why

    Crush, crush, crush...

    In one fleeting moment
    It's just us
    You look down
    Giving your self away
    I pause and blush
    Regretting what I can't say

    All sense and reason
    Felled as if by treason
    No defence or scar
    Could prepare me for
    How beautiful you are

    No pillow or song
    Can offer a cure
    My manic crush
    Is your allure

    In one fleeting moment
    It's just us
    We both want this
    A night of lust
    But we're defeated
    By a crush

    Crush, crush, crush...

    I forgot what it feels like
    To be shy
    To desire intently
    The poem of my eye

    Submitted on 2011-08-06 01:01:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      this is a very awesome piece. it feels like a song and i don't know why >_<

    i have something similar to this already on paper. i love the flow and the "crush crush crush"
    amazed on the world play.
    keep it up man.
    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by w0ords | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. The imagery was good and it flowed nicely and the emotions were conveyed perfectly.

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading

    | Posted on 2011-08-06 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Wonderful piece. very sweet. Good flow.

    No complaints on this at all thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2011-08-06 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]

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