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    dots Submission Name: Speaking of kitesdots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsSpeaking of kitesdots
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    Counting the heartbeats
    between 2 plastic cranes
    taught me to let you be the smoke
    I cannot consume.

    Time's beating hand will erase
    all the times I kissed your face
    in my mind,
    I will let sparrows take you now
    to fill another's cup with tears.

    Time to lock lips with destiny,
    can you close your eyes one last time
    as I take this away...

    We will be the same again, give or take a few fears spent.
    In the gists of madness
    unblossomed passions will fade
    like the day I flew my first kite.

    -Svw




    Submitted on 2011-08-06 04:24:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow this is some serious poetry...

    the first time i flew my kite..i will never forget the feeling of accomplishment of joy...of flying with it..

    my first taste of you...our love...was like that but now...i realize..you are too much for me, i can't keep up...i will let you go to fly to someone else...break his heart...but rather than let you break mine..i will free you...kiss you goodbye..after a few years..we will still have this...

    this took me places i liked..

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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