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    dots Submission Name: The game of Marydots
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    Author: Clayman
    ASL Info:    28 - getting late
    Elite Ratio:    6.34 - 609/327/167
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 538
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    dotsThe game of Marydots
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    I play the game of Mary,
    I speak the name of God
    when I step into the day.

    Older things linger still
    inside this vessel I drive.
    But time whittles my mind.

    I step 2 feet outside you
    to walk away from doubt
    and release you in the wind
    to fly again..




    Submitted on 2011-08-06 04:51:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i had the feeling as if i were playing a game reading and supposed to be guessing what it is that this is supposed to be...whats that game called? the vessel you drive? i am imagining this is your body that you are speaking of? stepping two feet outside yourself,is it? well this is what i got all in all not a bad game to be played...crazy...
    | Posted on 2011-08-07 00:00:00 | by crazyphreshone | [ Reply to This ]


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