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    dots Submission Name: Obediencedots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 197
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsObediencedots
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    This coffee is hot and bitter and
    has a taste of the real life morning that I feel
    stripped of all my shields and wondering

    in the car I zone out
    and almost got hit by a car, thinking for some reason it was my turn to go
    and I look back on traffic
    I look back on all the mistakes and near mistakes and demolished metal burning into the back of my skull
    and this pain eats away at the lining of my stomache

    rinses itself off down below into knots

    there is something wrong with my body

    read a lot of scripture about the temple last night
    read a lot of scripture about a mans work

    Am I left burning?
    Save the mans soul
    Where is the reward?

    No I am just waiting
    living out another day where nothing seems to comfort me all day

    reaching out for Faith
    this is not about faith says my heart
    and my spirit is bare and forced out of my chest

    I fall to my knees and pray for an exception
    and walk blindly into this permissive will




    Submitted on 2011-08-06 09:06:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      wow, so distracted by needing something in her life..the speaker...almost goes to the afterlife a bit too soon...

    often times life is like that...like some piece is missing..or maybe some peace..but something..even if we can't put our finger on it...

    everyday needs meaning...and often we live lives without it..

    some spellings in here.."a man's work" "the man's soul"

    minor but caused a pause in the reading..

    i like the introspection in this...2nd and 3rd lines...are wonderful...different and visual..but also with something left unsaid..lets us do some work.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-06 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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