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    dots Submission Name: "Once Before I Die"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
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    Words: 170
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dots"Once Before I Die"dots
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    Once before I die,
    without having to regret,
    I'd love to hold you in my arms
    like I did when we first met.

    Times were so much simpler then
    and we were young and gay,
    we loved and lived with all our hearts
    every moment of every day.

    Tomorrow was of no concern
    we lived and loved today
    your tender touch and loving kiss
    took my breath away.

    But time does not stand still
    nor hold youth and love in sway
    a terrible war loomed dark and fierce
    and I was called away.

    Absence is no friend of love
    and cherished memories
    are not enough to keep love fast
    or fill a lonely heart's needs.

    And so we went our separate ways
    but with desperate regrets
    about the space which changed our lives
    that we'd both like to forget.

    You're married now with family
    and I think of you and sigh
    I'd love to hold you close again
    just once before I die.




    Submitted on 2011-08-07 20:20:36     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is a lovely poem and rhymes very well. I love the line Absence is no friend of love which is so true.

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    | Posted on 2012-02-28 00:00:00 | by Wonderwords | [ Reply to This ]
      

    A very touching poem. I wonder how much your life would have been beautiful if you would have been with your beloved. The feeling of longing is very intense and is reflected by your words. Great work as always. Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-09-25 00:00:00 | by Ramneet | [ Reply to This ]
      You know something Ron, all great songs, stories and poems, have a story woven within them that relates to many many readers.

    This poem of yours has all of these attributes......it is superbly crafted.

    Very very well done Ron.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2011-08-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      you sure have a gift with words! Man our two year aniversy is coming up on september 15th....and he still makes me feel like I cant breath sometimes....I love this poem!
    | Posted on 2011-08-22 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow Ron, the emotions in everyword was so intense, I almost cried. This is my favorite of the poems I've read of yours so far. You are a wonderful poet. Love your work.
    Love that never died, just couldn't withstand the distance apart. Tragic but a wonderful love story. I hope you feel those arms again, if this is your lost love. Again wonderful poem by a very talented poet.. Desi
    P.S Will add this to my favorites
    | Posted on 2011-08-17 00:00:00 | by Desi | [ Reply to This ]
      Aaaw..this is touching. loving someone who has moved on long ago..hmm.
    loved this very much.
    | Posted on 2011-08-10 00:00:00 | by Amma | [ Reply to This ]
      Very bittersweet. I can relate to this one on a personal level, except I'm on the other end. It is so hard to move on because, you've given them your heart and soul. Now
    10 years have gone; I'm married with kids and he is also.
    We're both happy where we are at, but I do think about him sometimes and wonder what could have been.
    | Posted on 2011-08-08 00:00:00 | by lynn7 | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...

    I really liked this poem, it was beautiful. You utilized the rhyming scheme very well, and the ending was just....well it gave me goosebumps.

    It's very lovely, and also really sad. It's hard to move on, when you still love someone so dearly. How can you let them go? And you question, why they would let you go....

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-08-07 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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