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    dots Submission Name: Statedots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 82
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    Following along the lines
    my fingertips collide
    with every rush of wind that moves towards me

    I wrote a song

    carried along the electic membranes of the farther down

    casting aside the hollow steeple
    erasing the multitudes of doubt by dining on this idea of
    breathing life inside the tranforming schrimshaw coast

    beads of dew follow my fingers crisscrossing like little girls jumping rope
    ----------------breathing with an echo of light

    Submitted on 2011-08-08 14:30:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmmm... this has got to be about watching a sunrise on the beach. Because the only other thing I can get from it is female masterbation.. lol.

    Good poetry here.

    | Posted on 2011-08-13 00:00:00 | by snacky fish | [ Reply to This ]
      this is great. hand out the window great. i can feel this piece. travel with it. feel peace with an almost secret smile. and not secret as in being secretive. but the kind of secret smile that surprises people because they don't know what brought it about. it makes them curious. or at least that's been my experience.

    the way it is broken up feels like how thoughts might come to mingle with observations and i like that. as well as

    'erasing the multitudes of doubt /by dining on this idea/ of sunrises' -

    this idea of sunrises. i really like that. in the sense that there are things in life, at least for me, that i have had an idea about. just an idea. and sometimes they are more spectacular in real life. and sometimes not. but sunrises? i don't think i have ever been disappointed. and maybe it's because i've had no expectations.


    just some thoughts.
    | Posted on 2011-08-08 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]

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