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I would hate to misplace my sense
yet here is is, lost to me
gone with the
dusty road has patterns looping travelers round and round again
like Gods chasing their tales
on the trail hot on the heels of a memory
Submitted on 2011-08-09 15:54:06
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careful of spelling..."senseless"
and in the one line "here it is"?
this is like a very short version of emily dickinson's " i felt a funeral in my brain"
one interpretation of that poem is a person losing her mind...and in that interp..the appearance in the poem is that she is aware of it happening little by little..
like the gods chasing their tails...hot on the heels of a memory that just keeps getting harder to catch...
i like "admonition" on its own line...like in robert francis' poem "Hound" where "equivocal" stands alone..
that one important pivotal part of the poem..that word..having a line by itself...
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