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    dots Submission Name: If You Were Minedots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    57 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1846/1390/288
    Words: 179
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsIf You Were Minedots
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    If you were mine
    Id give to you my being and my soul
    My love for you would reach up to the sky
    Id find a way to make sure
    That your life was truly whole
    If you were mine,
    Id love you till I die

    If you were mine
    Id shower you with raindrops full of love
    My sun would brighten up your avenue
    Id give to you the brightest star
    That shines so high above
    If you were mine
    Id be forever true

    If you were mine
    Id make you happy every single day
    My heart would beat for you alone my dear
    Id never tell you any lies
    No matter come what may
    If you were mine
    Id always want you near

    If you were mine
    Id walk with you and always hold youre hand
    My eyes would always find their way to you
    Id marry you tomorrow
    And wed wear our wedding bands
    If you were mine
    Id make our dreams come true











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      Nothing but heartfelt and honest, what a beautiful write. Deep sigh. It gives a very day dreamy feeling and one of pure love and romance. As always I love reading your work.
    | Posted on 2012-02-06 00:00:00 | by stormyskies | [ Reply to This ]
      This is deeply intimate piece of work. It almost sounds like vows! i love the sincerity and transparency of your emotions.
    | Posted on 2011-08-10 00:00:00 | by beautywithin3 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a stunning love poem , Frank! Many a sigh will be made whilst reading this!

    Your work is always outstanding, and some of the best at the site. Thanks for sharing this.
    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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