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    dots Submission Name: come for medots
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    Author: Raistlin Sith
    ASL Info:    22/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 106/182/66
    Words: 107
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    another night alone in bed,
    when you could have been here instead,
    but you don't think me worth the time
    so it's just me and this damn rhyme.

    i'm sick of being overlooked,
    of being jerked around when hooked,
    of feeling the blows coming in
    i just want to be loved again.

    you give me such good memories,
    but as of now it's just a tease,
    when will i stop being dumb,
    and let this heartache just grow numb.

    i will not be your backup plan,
    go find that in another man,
    i'll be here for eternity,
    though you'll never come for me.




    Submitted on 2011-08-09 18:19:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hah! nice work
    but curiousity that leads to discovery when one transcends borders begs me to ask -is this a personal experience? If so pity. If not I think I GOT It worse! I am not even worth a backup plan! And my creaking bed springs gossip my loneliness! Just joking! Or am i? Fun read.
    Temidayo
    post script: hope the person in this poem got cable and mad apps in his cool phone,hope he got beer in the fridge and some xbox or ps console to console. Cause i HAVE. He he cool work thanks again.
    | Posted on 2011-08-12 00:00:00 | by Temidayo | [ Reply to This ]
      I enjoyed this, thought it was nicely done.

    i'm sick of being overlooked,
    of being jerked around when hooked,

    I like that part. Liked the way the flow came in
    and it provided detail for my mental eye balls.
    THanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-10 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      This was written very well. Flowed nicely, rhymed consistently, portrayed your emotions well, and the imagery was good.
    This was kind of hard for me to read, really hit home with me.I'm going through something similar.
    Chin up

    Keep up the good work and I'll keep reading

    H
    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]


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