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My Broken Friend

Author: manda_bear
ASL Info:    24;f; alabama
Elite Ratio:    4.05 - 57 /64 /23
Words: 167
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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My Broken Friend

You felt so alone and out
Of place in this world
You didn't realize all
The love you had in this
World from all who were
In your life
It doesn't make sense
To me how you can walk
Away from the life you
Still hadn't quite lived
The babies you didn't
Get to finish watching grow up
My broken friend we all
Miss you with each passing
Day more and more
I still dream about that night
You left us
My heart felt so heaving seeing
You in the state you were in
I tried to save you my broken friend
You hold my life in your hands
With how you chose your death
You just never knew how much
Your daughter truely needed you
In her life
She fights to live and grow
And you chose to end your
Own life and not be there
At her time of need
My broken friend I wish you
Were here so we all wasn't hurting

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