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    dots Submission Name: Communiondots
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    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsCommuniondots
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    I speak
    With the Voice of outstretched hands
    Bound for the multicolored Heavens, my fingertips dusted by glowing condensation
    Kissed

    My God
    spreads light into the crevices and
    prints on the psalms of my hands




    Submitted on 2011-08-11 10:40:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very odd - not odd as in
    strange & misread

    but odd like
    something very very new-- a stand-out piece .
    like from a very far away vision .

    the poem seems to kinda be
    drawing blood
    in a very religious light ....

    very deep
    | Posted on 2011-08-16 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting. I could visualize this as though you were painting a picture. Your poetry usually has that quality to it.
    | Posted on 2011-08-14 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      This paints a really really really good picture.
    I can see this very well:

    You, what I picture you would look like, with outstretched hands, receiving divine prescence.

    That last sentence, "prints on the psalms of my hands" is almost to be taken as you receiving God like a prophet. How God inspired Psalm (sounds close to palm) to write what he heard through God down, and that's where "prints" comes from, I would presume.

    I'm not religious at all, but I can appreciate this poem.

    Very cool.

    Matt
    | Posted on 2011-08-11 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]


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