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    dots Submission Name: Couldn't Google Thatdots
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    Author: Latin King
    ASL Info:    31/M/Los Angeles
    Elite Ratio:    2.39 - 104/232/145
    Words: 74
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 391
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    dotsCouldn't Google Thatdots
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    Everybody has questions,
    To answers that have no remedies,
    All the opinions and allegations,
    Can't answer such extremities.

    Many people seem to know it all,
    They have solutions to the impossible,
    Though some solutions soon fall,
    You still have to remain rational.

    I'm alongside those who know a lot,
    Yet it's too little of a knowledge gap,
    When my grandma died,
    Shit,
    I couldn't google to fix that!




    Submitted on 2011-08-11 22:30:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      many people know it all..or think they do..and it could be because the read a lot or watch a lot of tv or something...

    but often those same people know nothing about real life, real feelings..things that touch us deeply..

    google has information...but can't reason, can't feel, can't hurt...and can't teach us that either.

    i like the way you wrote this piece with the subtleness of the slant rhyme...and then the surprise ending that worked really well....

    the abrupt ending..i think we are all in for a rude awakening...we need to get away from the computers and start feeling life before it is too late.

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-11 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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