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    dots Submission Name: Ungiven a name IIdots

    Author: snacky fish
    ASL Info:    31/male/FL
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 377/472/111
    Words: 36
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 603
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    Bytes: 271

       Acrostic poetry.

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    dotsUngiven a name IIdots

    My eyes are locked
    Attention fully given
    Not that I have a choice
    In this melancholy matter
    Collapse my defenses

    Contra my resistance
    Ravished by beauty
    Unopposed you go
    Sullen I will stay
    Harboring a

    Submitted on 2011-08-13 21:36:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      leaving a...
    like the speaker is unsure of what they are left with. I like.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-18 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      even tho the piece is short
    i thought this was a very good write .

    its very grayish , like slowly approching , waiting, darkness at every corner .

    i would change a word .
    this is spooky good

    i dont have a fav line -- can't pick one
    i like all of the poem
    | Posted on 2011-08-16 00:00:00 | by Bloodstone | [ Reply to This ]
      A unique piece to be certain. I am into rhythm...just my way...I couldn't detect one in this. Perhaps that is its way. I liked the feeling of no control in this. A prisoner of flesh.
    | Posted on 2011-08-16 00:00:00 | by malcolmknight | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting style indeed....

    It made me feel

    And a little; at the same time as

    sadness crippling my will to carry on; slipping further into depression.

    "Ravished by beauty"

    some nice irony there. beautiful disasters that touch down on our life; like a tornado, clearing space for us to build.
    In that twisted yet optimist outlook on life.

    | Posted on 2011-08-14 00:00:00 | by OneDarkFlame92 | [ Reply to This ]
      manic crush....

    harboring a? interesting ending...leaving us wondering..

    a grudge? or just a sad feeling...

    interesting style of poetry..wrote some of these way way back...may try it again one of these days soon..

    you have put the idea in my head..

    i may write a
    | Posted on 2011-08-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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