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    dots Submission Name: A Friend In Need Is A Friend Indeeddots
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    Author: gothicgirl
    ASL Info:    23/f/recreant world
    Elite Ratio:    3.49 - 127/111/48
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 599
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1504



    Description:
       Its not very good but its about losing a friend.


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    dotsA Friend In Need Is A Friend Indeeddots
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    You think your better then me
    A better mother then I'll ever be
    but look in the mirror, a cold hearted bitch is what you'll see.
    you lack the vengence but I gain the pride
    thankfully that half of me has died
    emotionless, canitonic, super sonic
    only the rain cries,
    really it weeps in memory of the friends we could be
    and the side of you we've all been dieing to see.
    Just shut the fuck up, we both know your misearble, just like me
    but thats the point misery love company.

    Go ahead call me a slut, I don't care
    we both know all to well that life isn't fair
    you think you know me, but not anymore
    just back the fuck off before I put you to the floor
    you underestmate me my dear
    look into my eyes, I can turn into your worst nightmare.
    I'm a crazy bitch inside
    but I thought for some reason in you I could confide
    I trusted you, loved you
    I even thought hey this could work shes crazy too,
    but I'm not playing your games, your playing mine
    and in your darkness is where I'll shine.
    I'll turn up the heat and turn off the lights
    watch my fire ignight
    but I've realized you've already lost sight
    and here I thought we'd stick together till the end
    but I was wrong and all that's left is sadness at the loss of what I thought was a good friend.




    Submitted on 2011-08-13 22:22:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Friends fade away like distant sounds in the wind. Sometimes we just gotta move on and find new friends...
    | Posted on 2011-08-17 00:00:00 | by Paradox | [ Reply to This ]
      but you let loose and got it out...

    i don't feel critique or really comment is appropriate here...you needed to write it and you did.

    feel better?
    | Posted on 2011-08-13 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]


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