" the drops of grace fill a puddle around my feet." reminds me of a piece i did called "rain angel" very similar but our meanings are different. But yours left a wonderful visual with a very profound meaning. Mine was just playful and about love. Yours is more about in the moment watching it all happen for the sake of life itself. Very moving and fast pace in the beginning of stanzas until you slow her down at the end to really hit the meanings of the stanza home hard. Great Write.
that whole line
just blows me away
really takes the wind out of my sails
and itz so beautiful .
the section-line that has the word "Fate" ,
it doesn't destroy the poem at all
just really feel kinda out of place
i think if the word "Faith" was written in place of it.i think it would have changed its moods
Very cool visuals. I liked the playfulness at the beginning and how it flows into a more profound thing towards the end. it's seems like a very natural process - could apply to a lot of things, life, relationships, art, etc. Nice.
getting wet feels like being alive...i love standing out in the rain...that beautiful rain coming from above...and it soaks me with a feeling of being one with nature..of a sort of a baptism---starting over..
whimsical piece with a purpose...
it's "can't" in that one spot..
the last line of each stanza could be a poem in itself...i like when that happens with poetry.