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    dots Submission Name: Coldkilldots
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    Author: DaleP
    ASL Info:    57/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    6.21 - 629/553/330
    Words: 169
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsColdkilldots
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    The world is running out
    of everything.
    Except
    High Octane Madness.
    The lake of fire froze.
    Lost souls will trade you gold
    for a bag of coal.
    The champions of men have all caught a cold.
    If you close your eyes, you can pretend
    that the four horsemen are not wearing parkas
    to protect them from the wind.

    The last we saw of Fred he had an axe
    buried in his head.
    We all assumed he was dead.
    Then he shows at the bar.
    says "boys I have traveled far
    but you know
    the road to hell is closed
    on account of snow".

    The Devil's pitched a fit
    claims this is not the way
    the script was writ.
    He is hole up in an ice cave
    somewhere south of Xanadu.

    The Lord,
    in a state of moral
    inebriation has extended his
    vacation.

    Over two thousand years of
    anydaynow.
    I think I will just
    die
    and
    waitforit.





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      Oh Wow! Yes this is powerful and has very good meaning. Reminds me of gold miners~

    Lines I like-

    The lake of fire froze.
    Lost souls will trade you gold
    *
    The champions of men have all caught a cold
    *
    The Lord,
    in a state of moral
    inebriation has extended his
    vacation.
    *

    Excellent!

    Althea~



    | Posted on 2011-08-22 00:00:00 | by AltheaLaochra | [ Reply to This ]
      ice is a sufficient death
    (your cold snap
    has the freshest breath)
    I felt a tingle in my bones
    and then felt nothing
    and then felt so alone...
    | Posted on 2011-08-20 00:00:00 | by rws | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a very powerful poem. I enjoy the honesty as it depicts the modern age of man
    | Posted on 2011-08-20 00:00:00 | by colopoao | [ Reply to This ]
      there is a purpose for everything that has happened, and for what is happening now...we will find out sooner or later....when we shuffle off this mortal coil....something else awaits..we may be holed up with the devil or maybe joining the lord on his vacation...if he hasn't come back yet...

    but it definitely appears we are headed to the next place one way or the other...almost rushing there the way the world is going...
    yes, i agree with Lloyd...you are damn refreshing....so different...

    jacob
    | Posted on 2011-08-20 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]
      I find it amusing when people think they are mortal, that time starts and runs out. "Just die and wait for it"... good one that. Thanks for my evening dose of reality. "Moral inebriation" - get a patent on that one.

    Have we done Fred previously? You are quite refreshing.
    | Posted on 2011-08-20 00:00:00 | by Blue Monk | [ Reply to This ]


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