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    dots Submission Name: Haiku ichidots

    Author: Paradox
    ASL Info:    33/m/Earthbound
    Elite Ratio:    4.58 - 1055/434/90
    Words: 15
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       I don't know how many of you like haiku but lately I've been writing a lot of them. This is my first, I think, hence the title.I'll post the best ones on this site. I hope you like it.

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    dotsHaiku ichidots

    I raise my hand and
    touch the midnight spring sky
    the stars are trembling

    Submitted on 2011-08-22 12:39:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Are you going too vote for Obama again? LOL
    | Posted on 2013-08-02 00:00:00 | by poetotoe | [ Reply to This ]
      I've often noticed the stars trembling...I wonder how many of them are still there, and how many of them have long since died, the light reaching us long after the supernovas.
    | Posted on 2012-10-07 00:00:00 | by AsiaticFox | [ Reply to This ]
      Trembling like a blushing love. Sexy, sweet, I like this piece.
    | Posted on 2012-09-28 00:00:00 | by BevRead | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this one and felt the power of the writer and after reading this I felt it as well..the last part carries the whole haiku the beginning is slightly weak for me.. just a thought.

    | Posted on 2012-08-29 00:00:00 | by jeniecel | [ Reply to This ]
      I could never handle writing a haiku...I tend towards rambling, too many words and not enough sense to figure out how to write concisely. Or count syllables. In such a brief period you've created a speaker with so much confidence and given the impression that the world is at his/her fingertips. It's well done and more importantly, every one has that day that they can relate to, when they were on top of the world, just ready to grasp the world, and take charge.
    | Posted on 2012-03-14 00:00:00 | by SincerWritinAsh | [ Reply to This ]
      Can't say I'm into haiku, but this works for me. I feel the connection between self and cosmos with these few lines. - Jim
    | Posted on 2011-10-16 00:00:00 | by my shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      I love Haiku & just did a series for my hosts in Japan. I was so inspired by the mountains of Nikko ;-)


    Love, Peace, Joy, Abundance, Beauty & Prosperous Healthy Smiles to share ;-) ;-) ;-)
    | Posted on 2011-09-02 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Similarly to jacoberin I like the fact that it can be interpreted in so many ways.

    I saw it as a piece about confidence or like having a euphoric high and being able to reach the stars. Great piece. Relate-able in so many situations in life. This was definitely fitting when I got promoted early in the military, won a national drill meet in H.S.

    Good job
    | Posted on 2011-08-26 00:00:00 | by jjsevdt | [ Reply to This ]
      either the stars flicker...or this is a symbolic piece that indicates the strength and confidence of the speaker...

    the stars tremble..almost like God raising his hand...that which he made trembles before him...

    i like this...it has pretty open possibilites for interpretation...

    and that is always good.

    | Posted on 2011-08-22 00:00:00 | by jacoberin | [ Reply to This ]

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