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    dots Submission Name: Catsdots

    Author: blackdemigod13
    Elite Ratio:    1.52 - 56/60/41
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Cute little balls of fluff,
    When they're little they think they're tough.
    They meow when they're sad,
    They hiss when they're mad.
    They lay in the sun,
    They love to have fun.
    When they're happy they purr,
    Especially when you pet their fur.
    They will drink milk for hours,
    And would love if it came down in showers.
    But the thing they that makes them the most happy,
    Would be for them to get to take a nappy.

    Submitted on 2011-08-23 09:45:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! well spoken short sweet and to the point I loved IT LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT!
    I am a cat lover!
    | Posted on 2011-09-12 00:00:00 | by janekostman09 | [ Reply to This ]
      The first word that came to mind after reading this was "cute." And kittens are. Wish I could have a cat, but my boyfriend hates them and my daughter's allergic:(

    This reminds me of the poems I used to write when I was younger. Most of them rhymed. Rhyming can be tough, especially when you know what you would like to write. So not only are you challenged to find a rhyming word, but also to sustain a rhythm.

    Some things that helped me were; to think of a metronome, a steady beat, or to try to have the same number of syllables in each line.

    Rather than trying to think of all this while you're writing, go over the poem once it's done, and try to see if there are alternate words that would fit the rhyme, rhythm, or mood better.

    For example:

    Furry little balls of fluff
    When they're small, they think they're tough.

    Changing a couple of words left 7 syllables in each line. It also solved the problem of the repetition of "little" in lines 1 and 2.

    Switching it up with rhythm is OK too, like you have done between lines 2 and 3, however, leaving an extra space between these lines might be appropriate to the change of pace.

    Read as much poetry as you can, and write as often as you can. Try out different styles, if only for fun. Not everything will work out or be good, but it will stretch your writing skills.

    Hope you didn't mind my advice

    Take Care,

    | Posted on 2011-08-31 00:00:00 | by Soul-Hugger | [ Reply to This ]

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